večerna zarja
poskušam ne misliti
na njegov poljub
(the slovenian version of this senryu is slightly different in meaning)
posted by polona @ 22:46
Thursday, December 28, 2006
večerna zarja
poskušam ne misliti
na njegov poljub
(the slovenian version of this senryu is slightly different in meaning)
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15 Comments:
WOWZER! Good stuff, Polona! :)
ouch, polona. ouch, ouch, ouch! the sky wraps the words in exquisitely painful colour
mysteriously beautiful ... the glow of his kisssssssssssssssss.
Fino Polona!
WOW!!! Is right!! Bad kisser or too good to be true. Either way kind of sad.
Very powerful. I like it alot..
Another WOW!
I really like this one, Polona!
Beautiful, but a little sad!
Margie
Our Slovenian romance saga continues...
I like this — there are so many possible reasons for trying to not remember the taste of a kiss! The image is a wonderful fit.
well i certainly like the english version
(i gone all mushy) :)
nice one
Very nice, Polona. I see you hunted down that guy on the bus from a few weeks back . . . ;-)
OOOH! This one is great!
nice
john
Joj, kako čudovito!
dsanes se ves dan ni dalo priti sem, le zakaj?
aurora: i'm sure you guessed what i was going for here in the first place :)
thanks!
kai: thanks, ppbfly :-)
charlie: yes. definitely one of the possible interpretations.
ts: yes. mystery, too :)
hvala :)
pat: you know how i feel about your wows. could be either way (but i'll keep it my secret :)) thank you!
grish: powerful? good. thank you!
margie: i love wows, especially from a lady like you. many thanks!
sad... yes, that too :)
masago: too much like a soap opera but sometimes i have to keep you entertained :)
thanks
mb: you're quite right, there are.
thank you.
floots: in this case the english version is more multi-layered than the slovenian one. i love mushy :)
thanks
bearded: thank you.
i'll try to explain...
the slovenian version if rendered literally would not look too elegant:
(večerna zarja
poskušam se ne spominjati
okusa njegovega poljuba)
so i changed a few things to make it sound better but lost some meaning in the process.the literal rendition of the slovenian version would be:
evening glow
trying not to think
of his kiss
not quite the same, no?
richard: the inspiration for this one doesn't have much to do with romance :)
andrew: your OOOH is greatly appreciated. thnak you!
john: thanks, john.
neikka: ja, blogger je danes ful nepredvidljiv... problemi na vsej črti.
hvala za kompliment :)
you're welcome, bearded :)
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